The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types od nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. summarise the information by features, and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types od nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. summarise the information by features, and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate
distribution
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the distribution
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of three different
nutrients
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including
sodium
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, saturated fat and added sugar in four daily meals ( breakfast,
dinner
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, lunch,
snacks
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). These
nutrients
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can cause health problems if eaten
with
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in
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big quantities.
Overall
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,
sodium
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and saturated fat are shown with the highest value in
dinner
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than in other meals
while
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added sugar is more in
snacks
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.
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, breakfast is presented with the lowest values
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all daily meals. Regarding the pie charts,
sodium
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and saturated fat have approximately the same average percentage in
dinner
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with 43% and 37%, respectively.
Additionally
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, these
nutrients
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are shown
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second
prefer
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meal for lunch with 29% and 26%
while
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added sugar is the most
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nutrient for
snacks
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.
Also
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, people use
this
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nutrient for
dinner
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as well as
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it is given with 23%.
On the other hand
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,
Sodium
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and Saturated fat have
the
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low consumption with 14%,21% and 16% in breakfast and
snacks
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. These
nutrients
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have the same average percentages for
sodium
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consumption.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, sodium, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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