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The table and bar graph below showstime spent in leisure and householdactivities in the UK. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.

The table and bar graph below showstime spent in leisure and householdactivities in the UK. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.
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The table and bar graph below
showstime
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shows time
showtime
 spent
in
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on
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 leisure and
householdactivities
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household activities
 in the United Kingdom.
However
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, It's clear that the men are spending more time
on
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watching TV, videos, and listening to the radio,
in contrast
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,
women
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 are ordain a lot of
minutes
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 per day at the house tasks. On the one hand, the table
focus
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focuses
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 on three items.
Firstly
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, the average of watching TV and other facilities is the highest sector
by
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137
minutes
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 for males and 118
minutes
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 for females.
Secondly
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, reading books or magazines has the same rates with just over one minute for
women
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. The
last
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 section is
sports
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the sports
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 facility. it is expected that guys have
slight
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a slight
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 increase by four
minutes
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on the other hand
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, household activities are dominated by ladies.
overall
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, cooking and washing are 78
minutes
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 for
women
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. men are one to three lower than
women
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution of time
  • leisure activities
  • household activities
  • comparative analysis
  • societal preferences
  • lifestyle choices
  • demographic groups
  • time allocation
  • trends and patterns
  • social or economic changes
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