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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line charts provided display the
subscribers
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' amount to whether mobile or fixed phone lines between four varied countries throughout the
period
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 of 2005 and 2015, measured in
subscriptions
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 per hundred people. At first glance, it can be observed that mobile
subscriptions
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 saw a higher demand, as opposed to fixed ones. What is more, Uruguay and
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UK
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the UK
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 showed
a
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apply
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dominance
among
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over
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 other countries when it comes to
subscriptions
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 over
this
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period
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. On the one hand, mobile phone
subscriptions
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 described a few changes
on
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in
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 the country which reported the most
subscriptions
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.
UK
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consistenly
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consistently
 remained over 120
subscribers
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, whilst Uruguay experienced a
rose
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 throughout the entire
period
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, accounting
for
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from
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 less than 50
subscribers
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 in 2005 to about 150 in 2015. India saw a sharp increase toward the end of the
period
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, depicting roughly 80
subscribers
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 by 2015. Eritrea saw
ni
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no
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 variation within
this
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 time,
desplaying
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displaying
number
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numbers
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 close to 0. Fixed telephones didn't perform as
good
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well
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 as mobile phones. The figures barely changed all over the decade.
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UK
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The UK
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 remained
as
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apply
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the largest
subscriber's
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subscriber
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 number, showing over 55.
Urugay
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Uruguay
 followed
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UK
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the UK
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 closely with figures around 30,
while
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 India and Eritrea reported less than 10.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subscribers, period, subscriptions, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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