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Band 3

Complain about leakage of water in your rented apartment. It has not been solved by owner

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Dear Sir, I am writing to bring to your attention an issue regarding the substandard quality of water pipes in the kitchen and bathroom. On November 20, I moved in with my family members and from the first day we were
inconveniencing
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inconvenienced
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with
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by
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this
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 inconvenience. Upon inspection, I find that
frequency
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the frequency
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 of leakage gives rise to
increase
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an increase
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 day by day.
This
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 whole damage is only
due to
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poor
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the poor
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 materials of the pipes.
In addition
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,
entire
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the entire
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 ceiling
are
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is
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 damp, growth of mould is observed
along with
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slippery
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a slippery
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 surface. Yesterday, my mother
got
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apply
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slipped on
the
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a
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 wet surface
while
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 wiping the floors
that
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which
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leads
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led
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 to
fracture
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a fracture
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 of
ankle
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her ankle
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 bone. I tried multiple times to contact your maintenance and despite of providing any assistance they requested me to wait for one month for changes. I urge
to
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you to
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 resolve
this
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 matter promptly as it not only
surged
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raised
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 my water bill but
also
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give
Verb problem
caused
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 severe
pains
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pain
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my
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to my
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 mother. I kindly request you to hire
few
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a few
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 professional plumbers for
modification
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the modification
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 of outdated ducts with brand
new
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new ones
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.
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 matter requires immediate attention to uphold tenant satisfaction. Thank you for paying attention to
this
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 issue. Yours faithfully, Sarah

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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your letter in clear paragraphs: introduction, details of the problem, impact of the issue, and a request for action.
task achievement
Clarify some sentences for better understanding to make your complaints more effective, especially when describing the impact of the leakage.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the specific issues of the leakage and its impact.
coherence cohesion
The request for prompt action is polite yet firm, which is appropriate for the context.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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