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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs illustrate recent percentages of
students
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 studying in secondary and higher
education
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 in four continents of the world.
overall
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, the female group dominates the higher
education
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 system, with
Europe
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 being the most preferred continent.
while
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 Sub-Saharan Africa is chosen by least percentage of
students
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 among
school aged
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 population.
Students
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 choose
Europe
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,
Latin
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America
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 and East
America
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 for secondary
education
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 and the female pupils are dominating the males, around 100% of females are studying in
Europe
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 , and nearly 50% are studying in
Latin
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America
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, as compared to males , which is 90% and 45% respectively.
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 the male group dominates in East Asia which is around 50%.
whereas
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, less than 20% of
students
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 are studying in Sub-Saharan Africa. The higher
education
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 graph shows 50% of females are studying in
Europe
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 as compared to males which are around 42%.
while
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, the male
students
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 ratios in SSA,
Latin
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America
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 and East Asia remained less than 30%.
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, less than 20% of females have chosen SSA and
Latin
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America
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 and only around 25% chose East Asia

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, education, europe, latin, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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