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The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts given illustrate sales figures and data related to bananas and coffee collected in
five
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 countries, including
Switzerland
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,
Denmark
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, Belgium, Sweden, and the
UK
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, from 1999 to 2004.
Overall
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, It is clearly apparent that, in
five
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 years, the
UK
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's coffee
market
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share
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 rocketed significantly from 1.5
million
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 euros to second place in the
market
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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 in 2004.
In addition
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, in the banana sector,
Switzerland
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 achieved approximately more than three times the amount of sales and went from 15
million
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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 in 2004. Regarding coffee, in 1999,
Switzerland
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 had the highest
share
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 in the
market
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 with 3
million
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, followed by
Denmark
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 and the
UK
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 with 1.8 and 1.5
million
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, respectively. Sweden's figure of 0.8
million
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 was the lowest among the
five
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 regions.
Nevertheless
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, during
five
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 years, many things changed, leading to the
UK
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's surged trend of 20
million
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, and
Switzerland
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,
Denmark
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, and Belgium's
market
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share
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 increased to 6, 2, and 1.7
million
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
Switzerland
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 successfully experienced a significant increase in the banana sales
market
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, and the upward trend was vivid in three countries except for Sweden and
Denmark
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, which faced a slight decrease in their
market
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share
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, going from 1.8
million
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 to 1
million
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 and from 2
million
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 to 0.9
million
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 in 2004.
Nonetheless
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, in the
UK
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 the trend rocketed from 1
million
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 to 5 and in Belgium it increased remarkably from 0.6 to 4
million
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, switzerland, denmark, uk, market, share, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • substantial rise
  • stable sales
  • modest increase
  • significant increase
  • decline in sales
  • trends
  • comparisons
  • features
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