The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given bar graphs display the proportions of
males
and females, aged between 60 and 64, in 4 specific nations who had jobs in the years 1970 and 2001.
Overall
, more men were employed compared to
female
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in both years. The percentage of men over 60, who were employed, decreased in all four countries, from 1970 to 2000,
while
the female population showed
mixed
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pattern with only minor changes. Japan had the highest proportion of
males
that were working , with 84% and 76% respectively in the
year
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1970 and 2001.In 1970, around
three quarters
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of
males
over 60 in Australia, the United States and Belgium were employed ,
this
number reduced significantly to 47% for Australia, 55% for America and just 19% for Belgium in 2000. Compared to
males
, employment in
female
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population remained relatively stable. Japan had the highest number of females that were employed in both
year
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, with 43% and 40%
repectively
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respectively
. Belgium was the country where female
employement
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employment
was the least hovering just under one tenth in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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