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The first pie chart shows the percentage of water used for six products in 2004. The second chart illustrates the percentage of total income from products in 2004

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The pie charts show the proportion of
water
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 used to produce various
products
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 and the revenue these
products
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 generated in 2004.
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,
whereas
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 vegetables and
then
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 fruits were the biggest consumers of
water
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, other crops put together used just around a quarter of
water
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. It is
also
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 clear that fruits brought in the most
income
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, followed by vegetables, with the remaining
products
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 producing less than 20% of total
income
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. Examining the
products
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 which required a lot of
water
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, the preponderance of
water
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 was used to grow vegetables at 46%, though
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 crop only accounted for 31% of total
income
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.
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, fruits were the most profitable product generating 40% of the revenue,
while
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 consuming much less
water
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 (28%). The third biggest consumer of
water
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 was cereal, using 12% of
water
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 and producing the same percentage of
income
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. The other
products
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 exhibited much smaller figures for
water
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 usage and financial returns. Lime production consumed 8% of
water
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, contributing a similar proportion of
income
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. The remaining two crops – rice and dandelion – required a similar percentage of
water
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 (3%), but they yielded vastly different amounts of earnings: the former merely 1% and the latter 8%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, products, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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