The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
mulitple
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multiple
levels of both
men
and
women
in post-school qualification in Australia in the year 1999.
Overall
,
while
the proportion of
women
was highest in the undergraduate
diploma
, that of
men
peaked in the skilled vocational
diploma
. It is
also
noteworthy that a higher ratio of
men
than
women
studied regularly
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all
level
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levels
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in post-school qualifications except undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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and bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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.
Women
studying
in
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for
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skilled
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a skilled
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vocational
diploma
represented the
lowerest
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lowest
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segment of
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students
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in Australia, at 10
percent
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.
However
, the proportion
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to roughly 30%, 40%, and 50% in Postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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,
masters
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degree
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degrees
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, and bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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respectively. It rose to the highest percentage in undergraduate
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diplomas
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, at 70%. The proportion of
men
in
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with
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post-school qualifications was
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higher
than those
women
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of women
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which
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skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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, postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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, and
masters
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master's
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degree
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degrees
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at 90%, 70%, and 60% respectively.
Nevertheless
, females
in
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with
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undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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was higher twice time than males. In bachelor's
degree
, the
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of
men
and
women
was very close to the same.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, diploma, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skilled vocational diploma
  • Undergraduate diploma
  • Bachelor’s degree
  • Postgraduate diploma
  • Master’s degree
  • Proportion
  • Gender disparities
  • Educational trends
  • Equal representation
  • Workforce demands
  • Societal norms
  • Significant equalities
  • Dominated by
  • Reflecting
  • Opportunities
  • Implications
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