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Band 3.5

Some people think that it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 people think that better than
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employees
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wearing
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unforms
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forms
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, in my opinion, completely agree
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population
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the population
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form
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from
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wearing
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unform
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uniform
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 they can
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 comfortably.
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unform
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 a result, when
stuff
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staff
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wearing
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the
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apply
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unform
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uniform
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 they can protect their
cloths
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clothes
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 special they should
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do
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 them to wearing
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unform
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uniform
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. Another reason is that when
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wearing
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unform
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uniform
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 they will show to them respect
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company
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the company
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work
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good
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, in some
restaurant
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restaurants
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customer
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customers
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wearing
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unform
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 for them.
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 that they will appear as
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employees
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wear it before
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 out from their home to appear as completely
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front
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a
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 and owners.

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task achievement
Try to refine your introduction to clearly state your position. Clarify whether you agree or disagree and briefly outline your main points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. Use topic sentences to guide the reader through your essay.
task achievement
Use more specific examples and clear explanations to support your points, helping to demonstrate your arguments more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on paragraph transitions to improve the flow of your essay. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly across sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You provide multiple reasons to support your viewpoint, indicating a thoughtful consideration of the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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