The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data represent the jobs and earnings of graduate students in the Anthropology program at University X. Most
alumni
work full-time. Some minors take a part-time job and pursue a master’s degree simultaneously. For the earnings, the highest income comes from the government sector,
while
the smallest comes from freelancers and government offices. The data clearly show that more than half of the
alumni
are full-time workers after graduation. About 15% of them chose to work as part-timers, and less than 10% of the
alumni
chose to continue their master’s degree and only focus on that.
Besides
, 12% of the old grads are still unemployed, and about 8% didn’t get a track. The salaries are pretty varied. Five
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of the
alumni
have incomes in the range of 25k to 50k dollars, which come equally from consultants and government staff. Ten
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of those working in the private sector
also
have
this
total. Forty
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of the students got wages up to 75k for being consultants, and 25% of the students who work in private industries
also
have
this
income.
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