The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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The pie chart depicts the percentage of online
sales
for travel, books and clothes, film or music in New Zealand in the year
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2003 and 2013. As per the pie chart, travel, film and music covered up the largest proportion of the total online
sales
in both years. The dominant online sale in the year 2003 was travel
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products and services which accounted for 36%. But, in 2013, it dropped to 29% and became the second most popular sector of total online
sales
. In 2003, clothes attained the position of second major sector with 24% of
overall
sales
. But, as the year progressed and reached 2013, it reduced by 8%. Film and music occupied 21% of the
overall
sales
in 2003,
while
it increased to 33% which attained the topmost position in 2013. In 2013, the percentage of online
sales
for books was 22%
whereas
it was a little bit lower in 2003, which accounted for 19%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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