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The bar charts show education data related to young adults aged 15 years old in 10 different countries in 2015. The first chart shows in which countries adolescents do the most homework in terms of the hours per week. The second chart shows the nations that scored the best on an international science test. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show education data related to young adults aged 15 years old in 10 different countries in 2015. The first chart shows in which countries adolescents do the most homework in terms of the hours per week. The second chart shows the nations that scored the best on an international science test. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given two bar charts illustrate
hours
 of
housework
 by country
according to
 school per week by young adults in ten different countries in the year 2015 and the nations who scored top in the international
science
 test.
Overall
, Italy and Ireland obtained the highest number of
hours
 in
housework
while
 Finland scored top in
International
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Science
 Standard.
According to
 the first bar chart, Italian adolescents spent the highest 8.6
hours
in
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 their
housework
 per week, and the adolescents from Ireland spent 7.2
hours
in
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 their
housework
.
Moreover
, Canadian and Australian young people spent 5.7 and 5.9
hours
 respectively
in
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 their
housework
. Meanwhile, young people from Finland and South Korea spent the lowest amount of
hours
 in homework which was 2.8 and 2.9. In the second bar chart, we can see that
while
 teenage people from Finland spent the lowest amount of
hours
in
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 their homework, they
did
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top
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the top
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 score in
International
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the International
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Science
 Standard, which was 568.
Furthermore
, students from Hong Kong-China obtained the
second highest
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hours
 among all countries in
Science
. Meanwhile, Japan scored 541 in
Science
 Standard.
Netherlands
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The Netherlands
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 and the USA scored 518 and 516 in the
Science
 Standard respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housework, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 4 times.
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