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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in four different countries (
Australia
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, New
Zealand
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, the
UK
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, and the
USA
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) in two different years 2003 and 2006 and the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in these four countries in 2006.
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, in two different years, in all five countries, the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 increased. In
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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, the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 per 1000
people
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were
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 high compared to the
number
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 of migrant
workers
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 in the
UK
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 and in the
USA
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. In 2003, in
Australia
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, the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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were
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 152,000, and in 2006, it increased and reached 219,000. In the
UK
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, in 2003, the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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were
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 137,000. Meanwhile, in 2006, it became almost doubled and there were 266,000 migrant
workersin
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workers in
 the
UK
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.
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, In terms of the
USA
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, there were 577,000 migrant
workers
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 in 2003, and in 2006, it increased and showed 678,000
workers
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. In
Australia
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, there were 10.7
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in 2006. In terms of New
Zealand
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, there were 21.1 migrant
workers
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 per 1000
people
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.
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, In 2006, compared to
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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, in the
UK
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 and in the
USA
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, there were only 4.4 and 2.3
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 respectively.
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