Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st century, and sea levels continue to rise at alarming rate. What problems are associated with this, and what are some possible solutions?

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Utilizing fossil
fuels
over the
last
century has caused several dire hardships around the globe. Today, global warming, and
consequently
, nonstop increase in sea levels are alerting issues. Extinction of various species of animals and plants
as well as
drowning coastal cities are related to continuous global warming. Fortunately, it can be prevented by limiting fossil fuel consumption, and by using environmentally friendly
energy
sources. In comparison, species heat toleration is different from one another.
While
some of them are resistant to high temperatures like beetles, others can not endure
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the same temperature,
such
as penguins.
Therefore
, those who are sensitive to the warm weather will extinct sooner or later. As evidence, a notable portion of polar bears is in trouble because of unexpected heat in the pole.
Besides
, the
pollars'
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polar'
ice is shrinking at a remarkable pace, it directly affects the ocean and sea water levels. Most cities are located in coastal areas where a moderate rise in water height would result in overwhelm of them. Nederland, a country with low altitude from sea levels, is on the verge of drowning.
However
, if humans pursue precise policies, these problems can be alleviated significantly. The most important factor in global warming is the emission of greenhouse gases, which
trapping
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the sunshine inside the atmosphere
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and leads
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leads
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to the
countineous
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continuous
warming of our planet. Burning fossil
fuels
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for the greatest portion of the production of greenhouse gases.
Therefore
, by reducing the use of
this
type of fuel, humans can remarkably contribute to cooling the earth. Another effective way is utilizing renewable and environmentally friendly
energy
sources to cut the demand for fossil
fuels
. Solar and tidal
energy
are two examples
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humans can transform them into electricity and substitute them with damaging
fuels
.
To sum up
, global warming can bring about several issues like the extinction of creatures and submerging the coastal cities. Hopefully, it can be prevented by a reduction
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fossil fuel consumption and the widespread use of eco-friendly
energy
sources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • sea levels
  • alarming rate
  • flooding
  • displacement
  • marine ecosystems
  • saltwater intrusion
  • economic consequences
  • coastal infrastructure
  • arable land
  • food security
  • health risks
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • solar power
  • wind power
  • adaptation strategies
  • sea walls
  • coastal defenses
  • sustainable land-use planning
  • zoning laws
  • natural barriers
  • mangroves
  • coral reefs
  • wetlands
  • public awareness
  • eco-friendly practices
  • collective action
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