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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
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 maps compare Norbition
idustrial
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industrial
 town in
this
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 local development with a plan to redesign the same
area
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. We can see the new
buliding
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building
 proposal involves making a number of
change
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changes
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 to the development of
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area
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the area
an area
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,mainly
builds
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building
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 some new spaces around the big
traffic
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circle
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,and
factorys
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factories
factory
factors
 tran to housings. The most noticeable change from
this
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area
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 of
factorys
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factories
factors
factory
 will be all disappear and change to become housings.The big
traffic
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circle
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 will develop
two
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 new roads,
western
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the western
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road
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 end has
two
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 housings,
another
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and another
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 northern
road
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 builds
new
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a new
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 bridge and
cross
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crosses
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 the river.
In
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On
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this
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road
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of
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apply
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end
also
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 has been built new housing.
Besides
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,around big the
traffic
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circle
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,there are
two
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buliding
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building
buildings
 will open,close by
eastern
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the eastern
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 side is
medical
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the medical
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 centre and western side
is
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are
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 shops.
However
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,the farmland will move to
eastern
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the eastern
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area
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.In the southern big
traffic
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circle
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,there is built another small
traffic
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circle
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 will connect the
stright
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straight
road
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.In the
eastern
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east
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 of
big
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the big
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traffic
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road
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,will
build
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are
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 three housing,a playground and a school.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, area, traffic, circle, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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