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The graph below shows the population of India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
population
creased
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of
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in
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China
 and İndia between 2000 to 2050.
Overall
, İndia
has
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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rate
 in 2000,
similarly
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similarly,
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China
has
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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rate
 in 2000. Rather than İndia has
biggest
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the biggest
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rate
 in 2050
but
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we can’t say
same
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the same
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 thing for
China
.
China
 has
highest
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the highest
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rate
 from 2020 to 2030 period. First and foremost,
China
 lines
hasn’t
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haven’t
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stabile
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stable
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 numbers.
China
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China's
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rise
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rose
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 until
middle
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the middle
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 of 2020 the
rate
is
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was
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maximum
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a maximum
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of
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around 1.450
billions
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billion
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population
 before
the
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apply
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2010,
line
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the line
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 started from 1,250
billion
 people in 2000.
İn adittion
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In addition
, 1,400
billion
 people live in
China
 in the end.
On the other hand
,
İndian
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the İndian
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 graph not only
rise
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but
also
don’t
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doesn’t
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fall down ever. The highest
rate
 of İndia is 1,600
billion
population
 in 2050. In
contration
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contrast
,
lowest
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the lowest
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rate
is
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was
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 1,000
billion
population
 in 2000. İndia and
China
 have
same
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the same
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rate
 in 2030.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, i̇ndia, rate, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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