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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph illustrates the total number of
minutes
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 by telephone calls in the UK, representing three categories
such
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 as local
fixed-line
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, national and international
fixed-line
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 and mobiles between 1995-2002. The units are measured in billions.
Overall
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, national and international
fixed-line
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 and mobiles both have the same drop in
minutes
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 at the beginning and a rise
at the end
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. As for, local
fixed-line
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 have unstable for all years. As can be seen from the graph, from 1998 to1999 local
fixed-line
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 had the same rate of
minutes
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 about 90
minutes
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.
However
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, the
users
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user's
users'
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 local
fixed-line
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 in 1995 was around 70
minutes
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, and even as the years progressed in 2005, they were the same number at 70
minutes
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.
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, in 1995 people who used national and international
fixed-line
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 decreased by nearly 35
minutes
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.
While
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 in 2002 increased
minutes
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 to 65.
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, in 1995 people unfavourable use mobiles (all calls) they were just 5
minutes
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 compared in 2002 they went up to 45
minutes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, fixed-line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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