You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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the bar and line graph
illustrates
the average Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
temperature
and sale of swimming suits monthly in New York in the first half of 2012.
overall
, the average temperature
had a tendency to increase significantly over 5 months
from February to the end of the period. Following
this
trend, the bathing suit's turnover rose constantly in the first 4 months
before falling dramatically in the 2 last
months
.
In January, the average temperature
and revenue stood at a point relatively low at over 31F and under 100 hundred thousand, respectively. However
, the temperature
dropped slightly in February, while
the revenue also
had a gradual growth to around 125.
After that, the Fahrehelt in New York rose constantly in the rest of the period and reached a peak in the last
month at 65F. The swimming suit sales continued to go up and surged in April with the revenue nearly double the previous month at around 300. Although
the average temperature
was high in the last
two months
, bathing suit sales declined sharply from nearly 300 to around 80 in May. Finally
, the turnover was a negligible figure at 20 in the last
month.Submitted by kyobi46455 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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