Taking a risk is essential if people want to change their lives, many opportunities come with risks and benefits as well. I think people need to be brave enough to face the risks because it will have a big impact on them and many advantages will come

Taking a risk is essential if people want to change their lives, many opportunities come with risks and benefits as well. I think people need to be brave enough to face the risks because it will have a big impact on them and many advantages will come.
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Introduction Coherence
Make your introduction more detailed. Consider explaining clearly what the essay will discuss, and briefly mention both sides of the argument.
Supporting Details
Ensure that every main point is supported with specific examples or detailed explanations that relate directly to the topic.
Conclusion Coherence
Develop a conclusion that effectively summarizes the key points discussed and provides a final perspective on taking risks and change.
Task Coverage
Address counterarguments or alternative viewpoints to provide a comprehensive response to the task.
Topic Relevance
The essay introduces an interesting and relevant topic about taking risks for change.
Task Engagement
The writer attempts to engage with the task by acknowledging both risks and benefits associated with change.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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