The pie charts below show the online shopping sales of retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales of retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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The pie charts provide information about the online market sales in the categories of
travel
, film and music , books and clothes as well
in
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as in
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unique
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a unique
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country
which
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named New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in the first diagram that was seen the highest point of clothes and the lowest experienced category of books in online trade
while
in 2013 high number of sales in
travel
witnessed a leading position. In detail, looking
of
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increases first that
was
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were
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books and film/ music sectors. Both two figures
was
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from 19% and 21% in the first year to 22% and 33% respectively. When it comes to figures
of
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for
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cloth
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clothes
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and
travel
in 2003 , clothes demonstrated the highest point with about 24% after rapidly
decreased
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by roughly 8%.
In contrast
,
travel
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the travel
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sector accounted for the greatest proportion of
total
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the total
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marked
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market
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share on the
internet
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Internet
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in 2003 .
However
, it declined moderately to 29% in 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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