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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table compares the percentages of
appearence
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appearance
ofstudents
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of students
 in for different educational institutions from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
,it can be seen that
eventhough
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even though
,
community
schools
 had progressively increased the
attendence
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attendance
 of students, that
of
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had been decreased by all of
other
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 organisations.
To begin
 with,in 2000 52% of
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recordered
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recorded
 in voluntary-controlled
schools
, and it was the second highest over the time period.
However
,just half of that
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achived
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achieved
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schools
,and it was twice as much as both specialist and
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community
 institutions.
Furthermore
,after 5 years more than half of young learners enrolled
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community
 academies
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32%,and
on the other hand
 the voluntary-controlled
centers
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centres
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 dropped the student count by 24%. In comparison,
although
 the
propotion
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proportion
 of specialist teaching centers leveled off
approxiamately
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approximately
 at 10%,
whereas
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that of of other three centers
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.
In contrast
,
number
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 of learners had expanded in the
community
schools
 over the time span to 58%,which is more than two-fold than in
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beginning
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words community, schools with synonyms.
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