You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Congratulate him/her for also being accepted. -Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate. -Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together.

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Hey Ahmad, I am so happy to know that both of us have been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris,France.

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I got my acceptance letter really quickly

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I did not why they delayed it for you.I specifically came here with a gift to congratulate you. So

Last

night they emailed me to book a shared and without a doubt I reserved it for ourselves.you know we have been my brothers for 18 years and most of the time we spend

alot

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of time together. In

Paris

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there are

alot

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a lot

of activities but on our first

night

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I think that we must go and take a look

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the Eiffel Tower.I hope you will love that too and yes we cannot skip the Louvre museum. I hope everything will go smoothly Your friend Umar

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organization

Break the text into more distinct paragraphs to improve organization.

clarity

Clarify the timeline regarding the letter arrival and gift scenario to ensure clarity.

tone

The tone of the letter is friendly and personal, which suits the purpose.

engagement

Includes a detailed plan about visiting the Eiffel Tower and the Louvre, showing enthusiasm.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

137 words

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