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The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below shows
informations
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information
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 about
male
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males
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 and females selecting different subjects of
class
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such
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 as social
sciences
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,
enguneering
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engineering
,health,humanities,science and math,
last
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 but not
lest
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least
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 agriculture,in a university in 2012.
Overall
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,It is shown that
male
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males
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 are more into social
sciences
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course
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courses
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.
Following
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this
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,as it is shown they
prefare
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prefer
prepare
enguneering
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engineering
 courses.
On the other hand
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,Women are
also
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 more into social
sciences
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class
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.
Moreover
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,they
diclike
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like
 agriculture. As it is shown,Social
sciences
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 are more selected by
womens
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women
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 reaching 7000.
Moreover
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,
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the Enguneering
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Enguneering
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Engineering
class
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 is the
secoud
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second
 selected
class
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 by 3000
students
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.
In addition
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,health,humanities
and
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apply
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science and math have almost the same number of
students
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 between 2000 and 2010. Agriculture had less numbers of
students
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 by about 100. In terms of male
students
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,as it is shown there was a
rose
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rise
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 in social
sciences
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class
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 by 2500.
Furthermore
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,
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words class, sciences, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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