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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The diagram plans
compares
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 the differences between a ground floor library in 2001 and its
revedeloped
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developed
redeveloped
 version in 2009.
Overall
, there were extensive developments with regard
the
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 construction of facilities, additional tables, and
book
sections
 at the library. In 2001, there were only four types of
book
sections
: self-help
books
, history
books
, fiction
books
, and
newpaper
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newspapers
newspaper
 and periodicals. The reading section was located in the
center
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 of the room, with the librarian's desk situated right behind the entrance.
According to
 the improvements in 2009, other types of
books
 were added, increasing the total
book
sections
 on the left side to six.
Although
 the reading section in the
center
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 room remained, the tables were changed
with
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 longer ones.
While
 all
book
sections
 were located in one area, the fiction section was replaced with additional tables.
Additionally
, a children's area was built between the two reading
sections
. On the right side,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and periodicals were removed and converted into
a films
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a film
films
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 and
DVD
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DVDs
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.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider using a concluding sentence to summarize your findings. While your introduction is clear, adding a brief conclusion can provide a rounded end to your essay.
clarity
Double-check the spelling of words ('revedeloped') and remember to consistently proofread to catch small errors that could affect clarity.
complete response
Ensure that all changes between the two diagrams are fully explained; mention any elements that remained the same to provide more balance and comprehensiveness in your response.
logical structure
The essay includes a clear comparison between the features of the library in 2001 and 2009, adequately guiding the reader through the changes.
clear comprehensive ideas
You described the additional facilities and sections with clarity, which helps the reader picture the changes effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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