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The table shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the average band
scores
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 of
students
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 from various language groups namely,
German
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, French, Indonesian, and Malay.
Overall
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, the
students
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 from
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German
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 club secured the highest band.
Whereas
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, Malay
scores
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 the least
bands
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 in IELTS in
comparision
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comparison
 with other groups. It is clear from the given data that
German
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students
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 scored the highest in listening 6.8
bands
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.
Moreover
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, they attained
highest
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 marks in Speaking and writing ( 6.9
bands
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 and 6.6. ).
While
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, French and Indonesian children have
same
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scores
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 in Listening
as well as
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 in Reading, 6.3. and 6.1 respectively. The French
students
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achived
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achieved
 only one point less than
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German
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the German
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students
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 in
Writing
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the Writing
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 section.
Similarly
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, they scored almost equal marks in Speaking.
On the other hand
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, Malay
students
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 have
least
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scores
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 in Listening and
in
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Writing 6.2 and 6.0 in the following order.
However
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, they attain
maximum
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 in Reading which is 6.4
bands
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words scores, students, german, bands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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