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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, – say what the problem is – describe the accommodation you thought you were getting – ask the provider to solve the problem Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#course #country #accommodation #provider #addresses #sir #madam
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your kind notice that the
accomodation
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accommodation
 provided to me by your
course
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 organization has some major problems which need immediate attention. I had enrolled myself for the business analytics
course
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 which lasts for a month, held at the
Univeristy
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University
 of London.
While
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appying
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applying
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this
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course
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, I was assured an
accomodation
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accommodation
 from your team as it required me to relocate from India to London. I
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 have been staying in the allocated flat for about a week now.
However
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, I have encountered certain
seriosu
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serious
 issues. The provided flat has
highly
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 interrupted
water
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 supply
along with
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 leakage from the drainage pipes under the wash basin. As I was provided a staying facility by your team, I was quite sure that it will be in
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good condition with continuous
water
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suppy
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supply
 and no leakages from the pipes. But the reality here is not what I was assured about by the
course
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 providers.
Due to
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 the leakage
gets
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 difficult for me to complete the household chores with
additional
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 challenge of no
water
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 supply at times.
Therefore
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, it is my humble request to kindly look into the matter by
reparing
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repairing
preparing
 the drainage pipes and solving the problem of the
water
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 supply. If the issues seem to be
unsolvale
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unsolvable
, please
advice
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 some other
accomodation
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accommodation
so
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which will help me save time from these issues and concentrate on my
course
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 better. Hoping to hear
soom
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soon
 from you. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Tim Clarks.
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task achievement
Ensure to proofread the letter for typos and spelling mistakes, such as "accomodation" and "seriosu."
coherence cohesion
Try to organize the content more clearly by separating each main point into its own paragraph.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task: identifies the problem, describes expected conditions, and requests a solution.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite.
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