The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
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who qualified
three
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in three

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educational steps,
such
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as
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master
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master's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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,
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bachelor
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bachelor's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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and
Correct word choice
apply

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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etc. or non-qualified in two different countries, namely
Malaysia
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and Singapore.
Overall
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, the highest result was in the no qualification in science in
Malaysia
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
That
Correct determiner usage
These

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people
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

were higher than the
people
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

from Singapore in no qualification in science and school leaving exams steps, except
bachelor
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's
degree
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, and
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

they were the same in
master
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's
degree
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. It is obvious that the
people
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from both nations declined step by step. On the one hand, the statistics of students from
Malaysia
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who did not
qualified
Change the verb form
qualify

It appears that the verb qualified is incorrectly used with the helping verb did. Consider changing it to the base form.

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to
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for

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any science field were between 60 and 70
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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,
then
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it dropped
down
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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by 30
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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in the exams for leaving school.
Moreover
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the
amount
Change the quantifier
number

It appears that the quantifier the amount does not fit with the countable noun people. Consider changing the quantifier or the noun.

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of
people
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

who studied
bachelor
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's
degree
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in
Malaysia
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decreased slightly and became
exact
Change the word
exactly

Exact seems to be the wrong part of speech for this context.

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10
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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,
whereas
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

it was between five and ten for
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

master's
Correct article usage
a master's

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees

It seems that degree may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. On
the
Remove the article
apply

It is unlikely that your sentence needs the article the before another. Consider deleting the article.

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another
Correct quantifier usage
other

It seems that quantifier use may be incorrect here.

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hand, the number of
student
Change to a plural noun
students

The singular countable noun student follows the quantifier number, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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from
Singapure
Correct your spelling
Singapore

If you don’t want Singapure to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

who did not study anything
were
Change the verb form
was

The verb were does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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60
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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,
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

it declined twice when we
come
Wrong verb form
came

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb come. Consider changing it.

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to school leaving exams.
Although
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

students from Singapore who did
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bachelor
Change noun form
bachelor's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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were 20%,
but
Remove the conjunction
apply

It appears that the word but is unnecessary in this sentence. Consider removing it.

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that number changed for
master
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's
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Use synonyms
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees

It seems that degree may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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, it became similar
with
Change preposition
to

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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Malaysian
people
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, master, bachelor, malaysia, degree, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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