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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
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 who qualified
three
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in three
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 educational steps,
such
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 as
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master
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master's
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,
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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and
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apply
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etc. or non-qualified in two different countries, namely
Malaysia
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 and Singapore.
Overall
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, the highest result was in the no qualification in science in
Malaysia
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.
That
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These
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people
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 were higher than the
people
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 from Singapore in no qualification in science and school leaving exams steps, except
bachelor
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's
degree
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, and
also
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 they were the same in
master
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's
degree
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. It is obvious that the
people
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 from both nations declined step by step. On the one hand, the statistics of students from
Malaysia
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 who did not
qualified
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qualify
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to
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for
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 any science field were between 60 and 70
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percent
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per cent
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,
then
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 it dropped
down
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apply
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by 30
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percent
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per cent
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 in the exams for leaving school.
Moreover
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, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who studied
bachelor
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's
degree
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 in
Malaysia
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 decreased slightly and became
exact
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exactly
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 10
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percent
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per cent
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,
whereas
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 it was between five and ten for
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master's
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a master's
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degree
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degrees
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. On
the
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apply
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another
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other
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 hand, the number of
student
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students
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 from
Singapure
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Singapore
 who did not study anything
were
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was
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 60
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percent
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per cent
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,
then
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 it declined twice when we
come
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came
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 to school leaving exams.
Although
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 students from Singapore who did
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 were 20%,
but
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apply
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that number changed for
master
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's
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degree
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degrees
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, it became similar
with
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to
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 Malaysian
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, master, bachelor, malaysia, degree, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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