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A friend who is planning to visit you has asked you to describe the most interesting and enjoyable things to do in the community where you currently live. Write an email to your friend, telling them about these things. In your email, Say what these things are Say why they are interesting/enjoyable Suggest what you can do together Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’ Do not write any addresses

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Dear Sukhjit, I hope my message finds you well. I am
Glad
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 to know that you planned to visit here after so long.
However
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you some of the
acitivites
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activities
 and places which we are going to explore and I am sure
your
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this
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 trip going to be one of the most memorable and
unfrogetable
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unforgettable
 for your whole life.
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Moreover
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 I am just giving you some information regarding some places so you can pack your luggage
acoording
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according
 to
the
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 needs. First of all, So we decided to go
Banff
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, Where we all going to do some crazy
activites
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activities
 like Gondolla or boating.
Secondly
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, I decided to go on
treking
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trekking
talking
 so make sure you have
trecking
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tracking
trekking
 shoes and some warm clothes because the temperature of
banff
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Banff
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 going to be low for next week and the view of
the
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Lake Louise from the top of the mountain is worth of whole hard
trecking
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trekking
.
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, We
planned
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 to
do
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go
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 camping
also
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 where we are going to
some
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have some
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 fun. I hope you will find
this
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 interesting and have a safe journey Your lovingly
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coherence cohesion
Avoid smaller spelling mistakes like 'acitivites', 'trecking', and 'unfrogetable'.
task achievement
Consider elaborating more on why each activity is enjoyable or interesting.
coherence cohesion
The structure is logical; however, some sentences could be clearer with improved punctuation and conjunctions.
greeting and closing
The closing of the letter 'I hope you will find this interesting and have a safe journey' is warm and suitable for the context.
task achievement
The letter includes a variety of interesting activities planned, which is engaging for the reader.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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