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The given method depicts the cyclical process of producing the ethanol which combines several stages.

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The given method depicts the cyclical process of producing
the
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ethanol
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 which combines several stages. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the manufacturing of
the
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ethanol
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 involves natural and artificial operations. Starting with the harvesting the raw materials go through pre-processing and with the aid of bioprocess with bacteria there is
and
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 end product of
ethanol
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 which is ready for
using
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 in various sorts of industries.
Initially
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, the technique begins with
generation
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 of energy from sunlight and carbon dioxide in plants and trees. The raw materials
collecting
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 and
follows
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 to interim process. The pre-process gives cellulose which can be used in next the step of
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distracting the sugar. The sugar
on the other hand
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 with specific microbes and enzymes gives the
ethanol
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. The produced
ethanol
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 is the fuel for transportation systems like cars and planes, which has the sub-product the carbon dioxide.
The carbon
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 dioxide is
using
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 again all chains of the creation the biofuel.
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task achievement
Ensure that all the stages in the ethanol production process are described with clarity and precision. Some stages in your description might benefit from additional detail.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy and vocabulary usage, especially phrases that could be confusing or mislead the reader. For example, 'generation of energy from sunlight and carbon dioxide' and 'interim process' could be clarified further.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear sequence of stages in the chemical process, maintaining a logical flow from the beginning to the end.
task achievement
The introduction effectively provides an overview of the cyclical nature of ethanol production and mentions both natural and artificial processes.

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