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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the ratios of numerous uses of water in
America
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,Europe,Africa,and
Asia
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.
Overall
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,it can be seen that
even-though
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 Africa,
Asia
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,and South
America
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 mainly use aqua for farming purposes,both North
America
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 and Europe manipulate that
of
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apply
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mainly for commercial uses.
To begin
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 with,more than
four-fifth
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four-fifths
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 of H2O
use
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 for farming activities in Africa and
Asia
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,
while
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 Central
Asia
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 experienced
with
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88% as the highest ratio among all the other areas.
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,despite
of
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the business purposes in South East
Asia
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, those territories use that of just below one-tenth for industrial and homing activities. In
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addition
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addittion,
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 South
America
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also
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 manipulate 71%
water
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of water
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 for farming.
Furthermore
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,the figure for household affairs in both Central
America
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 and South East
Asia
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 is similar with 7%. In
contarst
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contrast
,Europe has the highest percentage for
commercial
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the commercial
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 field with 53%,and the figure for that of in North
amarica
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America
 is 43%.
On the other hand
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,the latter
hold
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 39% and 13% for agriculture and household respectively.In comparison,just below one-fifth of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of aqua is used for household chores in South
America
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 as the highest among all the states.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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