The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. --DELETED LINK--

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart provided above depicts five different statistics about
students
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enrolled in Manchester
University
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in
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years
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1937, 1967 and 2017.
It is clear that
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of enrollments saw a marked rise over the
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.
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a dramatic increase occurred in the proportion of
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students
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at the end
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, the percentage of those who attended the
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from nearby areas had significantly fallen since earlier
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. Regarding the
number
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of
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, in 1937, the
university
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had admitted a few
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above 300, over the next 30
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,
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almost tripled.
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the
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percentage
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whose homes were as close as 40 miles to the
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experienced a sharp decline
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40% in the year 1967, it decreased drastically to
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amount of 1-2 per cent later. For the first
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, overseas pupils made up just over 5% of all
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, but both the
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of total new registrations and
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of
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foreigners
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jumped almost six times and 5 times in 2017, to stand at 6254 and 32% respectively. It is worthwhile to mention, as time
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, pupils from far various countries attended
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the
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, with only from 4 countries
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the commencement, it reached
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102 by the end. Turning to the
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data,
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the beginning, 10% more men had studied
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the
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university
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than women, and
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gap expanded steadily to
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20 per cent in the middle year.
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, in the remaining
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, the trends reversed in
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a way that women outnumbered
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men
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by 10 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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