The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts provide key information about the film released ratios and the total
percentages
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of
ticket
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sales
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in a country in the time ranging from 1996 to 2006. The units are measured in
percentages
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that drama films represent the highest propitiation in the film released graph.
In addition
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, comedy tickets were the most
soled
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sold
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in 2006.
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, romance
ticket
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sales
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the
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had the
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lowest rate
at
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in
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the same year.
According to
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the data shown, during 2006, the
percentages
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of
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the film
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film
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films
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released were at the highest level in the drama section, with a significant 35%, which means that it increased
about
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by about
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10
percent
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per cent
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in that century. Comedy films
also
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increased from 20% in 1996 to 25% by 2006.
While
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fantasy and romance films approximately
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an equivalent
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an equivalent percentage
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percentages
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throughout the century. In terms of cinema
ticket
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sales
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, we can clearly observe that comedy
was dominate
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the graph with
a
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20% in 1996 and almost 23% in 2006. Drama
ticket
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sales
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also
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had similar ratios in
the
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both mentioned years.
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,
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fantasy soared from less than 5% to about 8%. Romance tickets
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on
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the other hand, plunged from 5% to approximately 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, ticket, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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