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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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These days,
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 reading, writing and maths
have
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an important parts
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an important part
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 of
eduaction
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education
, but with the
advant
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advantage
 of computers, some individuals believe that
computer
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skill
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skills
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 be made as a fourth
skill
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 as a
subject
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school
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. So, I completely agree
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this
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computer
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skill
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add
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at
school
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 as an important
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. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss
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, if they add
computer
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skill
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 at
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, it will be
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 for students. They will learn the way of using a
computer
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, and how off and on it.
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, they can do
any thing
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anything
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 by
computer
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,
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 as watching movies,
studing
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studying
, designing
photo
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 and
video
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, and they can
use
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 any
aplication
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application
 of
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computer
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the computer
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.
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, they can get
knwoladge
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knowledge
 of
working
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the working
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 network
in
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computer
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a computer
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.
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,
computer
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skill
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 will help them in the
futuer
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future
.
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, work and study.
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, they can
use
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computer
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computers
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 easily in their
work place
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workplace
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,
becuase
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because
 they have
idea
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an idea
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to
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use
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, and if they
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 any problem
in
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computer
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 they can
fixe
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fix
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 it.
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, now
computer
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skill
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skills
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is
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 very interesting,
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help
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helping
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 people to work
any
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 place
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need
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needs
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 to
use
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computer
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a computer
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,
such
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supermarket
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 and hospital.
To sum up
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, I strongly think that
computer
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skill
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 is an
aimportent
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important
skill
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 , and in my view,
it
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they
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 should
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at
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school
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subject
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, because it is beneficial for
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the student
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student
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students
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, and
it
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they
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 will support them in the future.

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task achievement
Try to develop your ideas further with more specific examples and details. This will strengthen your essay's argument and make your points more convincing.
general
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure improvements. Minor errors can distract from your message. Simple proofreading can help.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, laying out the main points effectively.
task achievement
You have a strong thesis statement which shows clear agreement with the topic, and your paragraphs relate back to it.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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