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The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
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The process provides data about manufacturing
leather
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 products.
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it is clear that
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 the production of
leather
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 consists of 10 stages with products being transmitted by tracks that start with drying animal skins and end with the manufacturing of clothes. In detail, for manufacturing
leather
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, staff should transfer animal skins from animals to a special place before they dry; afterwards, they are transmitted by lorries to the factory, which puts the skins into the water for washing. The next step,prepare the product, soaking it in a machine.
As well as
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leather
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 goods, they
also
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 fuse tanning powder in the water with the vegetable matter before machine polishing the
leather
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. Looking at the manufactured product
,
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is sent by special tracks for
leather
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 to a factory that prepares clothes.
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, in the factory, the prepared
leather
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 is shaped into clothes;
for instance
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, shoes, bags, and hats.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leather with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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