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Explain the process of biofuel production and how ethanol is made with the help of the given process diagram.

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The linear diagram illustrates the operation of biofuel by which
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 is generated. Looking from the
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, perspective it is readily apparent that there are starting from growing the plants and trees with the help of taken energy in the form of sunlight and carbon dioxide from the environment. In the first step of growing the plants and trees are harvested from the plant and carried out for pre-processing in the mill to get the cellulose. After that, the cellulose is moved for the next processing in the factory to produce sugar. In the final step of
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 process, microbes are added to the sugar to produce
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 as a final product for end users.
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,
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ethanol
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 is used as a fuel in cars, trucks,bikes and aeroplanes, after consuming the
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, there vehicles emit carbon dioxide into the environment which is taken by plants and trees for their growth.
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task achievement
Ensure that the main points are well-supported with details from the diagram, such as mentioning specific processes involved in each stage more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
Include more logical connectors to enhance the flow of information and improve coherence throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Revise the conclusion to better reflect the overall process described, aiming for a more insightful summary.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear process overview, capturing the key stages involved in biofuel production.
coherence cohesion
The introduction successfully sets the context for the description by mentioning the sources of energy for plants.

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