You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter • say how you feel about his performance • give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities Write at least 150 words.

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Dear
Mikle
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Mike
Jackson, Hope
this
email finds you well, I am writing to express my positive thoughts about your performance and ask for your advice as a beginner signer for
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“Sonya”. I have recently visited your concert in New York and would like to express my gratitude for organizing
such
a beautiful event.
Eventhough
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Even though
there were other singers performing, your performance was my favourite one.
Thw
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The
whole performance was very inspiring, it was especially fascinating how you
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advanced choreography and signing
while
also
maintain
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the breath. For a
while
me
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and my
band
have been trying to build
music
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career, so
me
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and my friends created a
band
that is
called “Sonya”. We are inspired by R&B and Jazz music. We perform in local bars and dream about being recognized around the
worlds
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as you are. Our
band
would highly appreciate
if
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you could give
as
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us
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an advice
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advice
a piece of advice
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for
achiving
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achieving
archiving
our dream in
music
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industry. As a professional artist anything you say would be taken very seriously and we would be on cloud seven if you would be able to direct ‘’Sonya’’ in the right course. Me and ‘Sonya’ are looking forward
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your response. Truly yours, Britney Salivan
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task achievement
Pay attention to minor grammar and spelling issues, such as 'signing' instead of 'singing' and 'achiving' instead of 'achieving', to enhance clarity and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. For instance, the paragraph discussing your musical activities and the band's dreams can be split for clarity.
task achievement
The letter effectively conveys admiration and appreciation for the singer's performance, which addresses the task achievement criterion well.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitably respectful and conveys enthusiasm, which is appropriate for a letter to a professional singer.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a greeting, introduction, body with detailed ideas, and a closing, demonstrating good coherence and cohesion.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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