The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration demonstrates how bricks are made for the building industry.
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, it is a complex process and there are 7 main steps of producing bricks. It begins from extracting raw material to
finish
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in packaging and delivering. First of all, clay, which is the raw material, is dug out from the ground by a machine.
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it is placed on a metal grid to be purified and they are next disposed on a roller. It is
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mixed with sand and water.
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composition is either put in a mould or
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cut by a wire to produce rectangular-shaped bricks.
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, they are dried in an oven for 24-48 hours.
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, they are first heated at moderate and
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extremely high temperatures in a kiln. After that, they are cooled in a special chamber where they
stayed
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for 2 or 3 days.
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, they are ready and stored together and
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delivered by truck.
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