The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates how bricks are made for the building industry.
Overall
, it is a complex process and there are 7 main steps of producing bricks. It begins from extracting raw material to Linking Words
finish
in packaging and delivering.
First of all, clay, which is the raw material, is dug out from the ground by a machine. Wrong verb form
finishing
Next,
it is placed on a metal grid to be purified and they are next disposed on a roller.
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then
mixed with sand and water. Linking Words
This
composition is either put in a mould or Linking Words
is
cut by a wire to produce rectangular-shaped bricks.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Secondly
, they are dried in an oven for 24-48 hours. Linking Words
Furthermore
, they are first heated at moderate and Linking Words
then
extremely high temperatures in a kiln. After that, they are cooled in a special chamber where they Linking Words
stayed
for 2 or 3 days.
Wrong verb form
stay
Finally
, they are ready and stored together and Linking Words
then
delivered by truck.Linking Words
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