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The maps below show the changes which took place in the resort town of PalmGrove which is 450 kilometers from the nearest city from 1950 to 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The maps below show the changes which took place in the resort town of PalmGrove which is 450 kilometers from the nearest city from 1950 to 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The given maps illustrate the changes that
occured
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occurred
 in
residential
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the residential
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town
 of PalmGrove between 1950 and 2000.
This
town
has
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is
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 450
kilometers
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kilometres
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 distant from the nearest city.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the layout of the
town
 had become more urbanized with
building
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the building
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several
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of several
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 hotels,
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and airport
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airport
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airports
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 and
also
 adding
two
 extra
lane
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lanes
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of road
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road
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roads
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. There were
two
beaches
, which were located
at
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in
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 the middle of the resort has stayed
unchange
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changed
. There were
two lane
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two-lane
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road
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roads
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 at the top of the
town
 in 1950 which was turned into
four lane
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four-lane
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road
 in 1975 and 2000. There were
trhee
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three
 hotels and four docks at the edge of the
beaches
 in 1950
that
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apply
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had increased to five and four in 1975
respectivaly
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respectively
. It is noteworthy that in 2000, there
are
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were
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 14 hotels and
also
 the docks entirely omitted. There was an airport which was built in 2000 in the right part of the
town
 near to
road
.There are
two
beaches
which their
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whose
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 location
had
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had to
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 remain
unchange
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unchanged
at
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in
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 the middle of the resort.
However
, the top beach had become bigger and
also
, a connecting route was built between those
two
beaches
 from 1975.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, two, road, beaches with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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