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The chart below shows the results of survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The chart illustrates the number of
survey
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surveys
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 about
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people’s
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people
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 who
buying
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buy
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 and
drinking
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drink
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coffee
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 and
tea
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 in their
habits
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 in five Australian cities (Sydney,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart). The units are measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, in
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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Hobart,
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 prefer to
went
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go
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 to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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. The
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 of
people
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 who
drinking
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drink
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habits
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 in these five cities is individuals
that
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who
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 bought fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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. In terms of Sydney,
Melbourne
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 and Brisbane, in
the
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apply
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Sydney the
percentage
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 of bought fresh
coffee
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 in 4
weeks
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 ago
is
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was
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 about 43%
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percent
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per cent
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also
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 bought
instant
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coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 is the second
popular
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most popular
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 drinking
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habits
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habit
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 in
this
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city
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 with just
little
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a little
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 above 45%
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percent
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per cent
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what is more
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, what is more,
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 went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in 4
last
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weeks
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 is the highest
percentage
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 in
this
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city
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 in approximately 62%. In terms of
Melbourne
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a significant
different
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difference
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 between
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of bought fresh
coffee
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 and used
instant
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coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 (around 42%
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percent
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per cent
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 and about 48%
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percent
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per cent
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) respectively
furthermore
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 the proportion of
persons
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people
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 who went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
last
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 4
weeks
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 comprise of about 63%
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percent
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per cent
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. regarding
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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Brisbane
city
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, in
this
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city
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percentage
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 of
people
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that
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who
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 went to
café
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a café
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 4
weeks
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 ago
reach
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reached
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 a
pick
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peak of
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 around 56%
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percent
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per cent
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 and bought
instant
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coffee
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 and
bought
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apply
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fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 is roughly 53% and approximately 34% respectively. With regards to
remaining
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the remaining
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 cities, in Adelaide there is little difference between
bought
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buying
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 fresh and bought
instant
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coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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weeks
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 (both of them are about 50%
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percent
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per cent
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)
also
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 went to a café for drink
habits
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 is the
last
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 option that
people
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 chosen
this
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 item with around 34%
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percent
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per cent
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. In terms of Hobart
city
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, the most
favorable
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favourable
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chose
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choice
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 for
people
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 was
went
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to go
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 to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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inn
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in
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 4
weeks
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 ago (roughly 64%
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percent
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per cent
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) and bought
instant
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coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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is
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apply
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about 54%
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percent
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per cent
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 and the
last
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 column
belong
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belongs
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 to bought fresh
coffee
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 with around 37%
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, habits, melbourne, percentage, people, café, weeks, percent, instant, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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