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Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.

Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.
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The chart
illustrate
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 how
people
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 in
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the united
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united states
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United States
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 ate in fast
food
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 diners over the 10 period.
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,There was a
signifecant
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significant
diffrencec
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difference
differences
betweet
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between
 those periods.In 2003 and 2006,Most
of
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people
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 used to eat fast
food
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 once a week.
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,In 2013,
people
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eat
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ate
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 fast
food
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 once or twice a month. In detail,In 2003,30% of
people
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ete
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ate
 fast
food
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 once a week
in
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apply
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this
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year and 5 per sent of
people
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 had never
ate
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eaten
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 fast
food
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 during
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this
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that
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 year.
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,There was a slight
rose
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 in 2006 by 3% of
people
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 who eat once a week and it remained the same
of
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people
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 who had never
eat
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eaten
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 fast
food
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. Regarding the
remain
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remaining
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 information,In 2013 it recorded the highest level about 33 per cent for
people
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 who eat once or twice a month.Meanwhile,it rose by 1% for
people
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 who never eat fast
food
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compering
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compared
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 to 2003 and 2006.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food restaurant
  • Frequency
  • Consumption
  • Decadal change
  • Trend analysis
  • Peak years
  • Demographics
  • Eating out
  • Health trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Food industry
  • Demographic segmentation
  • Cuisine
  • Independent outlets
  • Chain restaurants
  • Longitudinal study
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