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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides the data of how the UK unemployed spent their
time
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last
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 year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most
women
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 spent their
time
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 doing chores,
whereas
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 men
looking
Wrong verb form
looked
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 for a job. In the morning, most of the men around 22% highly straight to looking for a job. Others 20% and 19% of it
its
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it's
it is
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 doing shopping or housework. Meanwhile,
least
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the least
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 of them
doing
Wrong verb form
do
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 activities
such
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 as sitting around or drinking.
On the other hand
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, 49% of
women
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 in the morning doing their housework and only 1% of them
playing
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play
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sport
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sports
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 or
drinking
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drink
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. In the afternoon, 12-14% of men highly
spent
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spend
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 their
time
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by
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apply
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watching
a
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apply
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tv, gardening, visiting friends, or
keep doing
Verb problem
apply
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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job hunting. Only a few of them
that staying
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stay
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 in bed with only 1%.
In contrast
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, 21% of
women
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 in the afternoon continue their activity in the morning by doing chores. Another 17% of
women
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 its either shopping or visiting relatives. None of the
women
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 spent their
time
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 in the afternoon
by
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apply
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staying in bed or playing
sport
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sports
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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