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Band 2.5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below provides information on the number of what
men
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 and
women
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do
Wrong verb form
did
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 during their unemployed time
last
Linking Words
 year in the UK. The data
consist
Correct subject-verb agreement
consists
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with
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of
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 time in a day which are in the morning and the afternoon.
Overall
Linking Words
, job hunting and housework
have
Verb problem
are
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 the highest activities which
men
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 and
women
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 do in the morning time.
While
Linking Words
 drinking and playing
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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 have the lowest.
From
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In
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 the afternoon
men
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 usually
watching a tv
Correct your spelling
watch TV
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 and
women
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doing
Wrong verb form
do
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 some housework same as in the morning.
In contrast
Linking Words
, there are
least
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the least
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 number which
men
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 only staying in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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bed and
also
Linking Words
women
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to
Change preposition
apply
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playing sport. As we can see when it comes in the morning
men
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 and
women
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 usually do some job hunting, housework,
shoppping
Correct your spelling
shopping
, gardening, and visiting some friends.
In contrast
Linking Words
, there are dip number for
waling
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walking
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 and doing nothing From the Afternoon
men
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 and
women
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 mostly
doing watching
Wrong verb form
watch
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tv
Correct your spelling
TV
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,
visiting
Wrong verb form
visit
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 friends, and
job
Add a missing verb
do job
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 hunting.
While
Linking Words
same
Correct your spelling
some
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 as morning they
dont
Correct your spelling
don't
 do stay in the bed for too long.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure to provide a clearer logical structure with defined introduction and conclusion. Summarize each section clearly.
Task Achievement
Clarify the main points using more precise language and support them with examples.
Task Achievement
You successfully identified key activities for men and women in both morning and afternoon.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your comparison between male and female activities showed a comprehensive understanding of the data.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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