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The chart below shows the diffrent levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the propotion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make write least to 150 word.

The chart below shows the diffrent levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the propotion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make write least to 150 word.
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The graph indicates the different levels of qualification in post-school in Australia separated by gender in the year 1999.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that
men
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 have a skilled vocational diploma higher
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than others
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; meanwhile, a large percentage of undergraduate diplomas
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women
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.
In contrast
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, bachelor's degrees have similar numbers for both genders.
To begin
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 with, the greatest percentage of
men
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 have a skilled vocational diploma around 90%
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while women
 in the same category degree have only 10%.
In addition
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, the average of
men
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 who have postgraduate diplomas and master's degrees is more than
women
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 circa 60-70% and only 30-40% of
women
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 have
this
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 qualification.
On the other hand
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, the massive quota of females is undergraduate diplomas which is about 70%;
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, just 35% of
men
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 succeed in
this
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 diploma.
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, the total of bachelor's degrees for
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has
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 a brief 50%
although
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,
men
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 have nearly figure with
women
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 with approximately 45%
but
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women
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 have peak amount than.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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