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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph compares the proportion of
goods
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 transported in the UK from 1874 to 2002 by four
transportation
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 modes (road,
water
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, rail, and
pipeline
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).
Overall
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, road,
water
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, and
pipeline
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transportation
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 experienced an increased trend,
while
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 rail
transportation
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 decreased over the period. In 1975, the road carried stood at 70
million
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tonnes
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 before reaching a peak at 90
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000, the highest among
four
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the four
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 categories in all years.
Similarly
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, the figure
of
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for
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water
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 and
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pipeline
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pipelines
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 witnessed a slight increase from 1978 to 1982, reporting
at
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apply
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approximately 42
million
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tonnes
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 and 21
million
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tonnes
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.
While
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 the
pipeline
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 carried remained stable for the following years,
the
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apply
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water
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transportation
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 peaked at 61
million
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tonnes
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 by the end of the period as the second most popular of
goods
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 transported in the UK. Regarding rail-carried
goods
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, the number of
goods
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 transported saw a fluctuation trend from the beginning until the end of the period at 40
million
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tonnes
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, which was the second lowest of the transported
goods
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, transportation, water, pipeline, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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