The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
do
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the United Correct your spelling
from
State
choose to be with their families, co-workers, partners, children, friends, or alone. Fix the agreement mistake
States
Furthermore
, it also
takes into consideration the amount time
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of time
is
spent.
We see from the previous chart, that the choice of who spend your Unnecessary verb
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time
with is hugely influenced by age
. Therefore
, we can say that Americans, as well as
people from other nationalities, tend to go through 3 main phases: youth from 20-30 years of age
, adulthood around 40-50, and lastly
the geriatric group from 60 and older.
First,
younger people tend
spend most of Add the particle
tend to
the
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their
time
with
either with their families, or alone. Change preposition
apply
Nevertheless
, as they get their first job and form a family, their priorities change into devoting more hours to their families, co-workers, and children. but, would still find time
to injoy soltitiude
.
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enjoy solitude
second,
older adults now favour
less Verb problem
spend
time
with their children, spend the least amount of time
with friends and family, and are more eager to be with themselves.
Third,
as our last
group advances in age
, they spend much more hours in silence than any other group-
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group
age
, except that partners are the only ones allowed to join. Furthermore
, retirement make
it harder to keep close contact with colleagues.
In the end, Change the verb form
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time
is spent differently age
we age
. Issues like work and marrige
can have some Correct your spelling
marriage
effect
as well.Fix the agreement mistake
effects
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