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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
decribe
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describe
 a change in
a
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the
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 route for a city hospital in two different years ( 2007 and 2010).
Overall
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, areas
near by
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nearby
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 hospital
road
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 had been replaced with various
failities
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facilities
.
The
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A
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 major change had been
occured
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occurred
 around
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 by giving place for two roundabouts. In 2010, the city
road
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 toward
hospital
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the hospital
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 in the
south- east
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south-east
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 had been added with a roundabout which previously simply headed to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 with bus stops on both sides.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 roundabout opened into a big bus station and
other
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the other
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 side for
hospital
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a hospital
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road
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. A hospital
road
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further
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 occupied with a roundabout facing the main hospital in the north.
Subsequently
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, a car park for staff on the right of a roundabout in the east adjacent to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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. As compared
in
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to
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 2007 , with straight roads with combined car parking
amenity
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amenities
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 for both public and hospital members.
Although
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, parking space for common people paved over in the
north- east
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northeast
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 direction just about a left turn from a previous car park.
Rest
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The rest
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 of
roads
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the roads
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, ring
road
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 and city
road
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 remained
same
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the same
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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