Nawadays families are not as close as they used to be. what do you think are the causes of this? what can be doen to make families closer?

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The
reasons
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families have grown apart over time are growth of
technology
. Nowadays, people are using
technology
as their main daily
such
as communicating through phones, watching
news
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from
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television, playing games
in
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computer
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, et cetera. It shows, that
technology
have
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taken
places
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among
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human life.
As
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the same idea as
families connection
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, family members often
relied
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to
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technology
which leads them to have an individual life.
This
issue can be fixed
,
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if their taking
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over
virtual-life
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and trying to
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to each other. Having dinner together and go vacation can
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bonds.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider expanding the introduction and providing a clear conclusion. This will help to define the structure and closure of your essay, guiding the reader from start to finish.
supported main points
Make sure each point you raise is well-supported with examples or explanations. This will enhance the clarity and relevance of your essay.
relevant specific examples
Expand on the points made about technology to include more specific examples, or consider adding another cause to provide a more comprehensive viewpoint.
complete response
The essay addresses the task by identifying a cause (technology) and suggesting possible solutions (dinner together, vacation) to make families closer.
logical structure
Ideas in the essay generally follow a logical order, discussing causes first and then solutions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Work-life balance
  • Geographical distance
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Cultural shifts
  • Individualism
  • Family cohesion
  • Career-oriented
  • Digital platforms
  • Boom in social activities
  • Frequent family gatherings
  • Familial bonds
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