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the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average australian household. the second chart shoes the greenhouse gas emissoions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average australian household. the second chart shoes the greenhouse gas emissoions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts demonstrate the proportion of average
using
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household
energy
 and
greenhouse
gas
 emissions in Australia.
Overall
, heating is the most
energy
 consuming in Australian households and water heating which has formed the highest
percentage
 of
greenhouse
 emissions has nearly the same
percentage
 in
energy
 using the chart. As
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 said, heating has formed the highest
percentage
in
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energy
using
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, in the contrary cooling has the lowest amount of
using
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 which is the same in
greenhouse
gas
emission
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 as well. In both
charts
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 it
is consider
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is considered
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 as same
percentage
 with just
1
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a 1
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% difference. The other similar feature is lightning,
household
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the household
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consuming
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consumption
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 rate for lighting is about 4% and in
greenhouse
gas
 emissions it is twice
like
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that
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 8%. It is
also
 the same for using refrigeration in both charts, the
energy
 usage is 7%
however
 in
greenhouse
gas
 emission
this
 amount is about double and it is 14%. In
household
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the household
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greenhouse
gas
 emission chart the proportion of
refigeration
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refrigeration
 and heating consider the same with just
1
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a 1
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%
differenced
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difference
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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