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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates the
amount
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 of export
earnings
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 of a country from different categories including
Petroleum
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products
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, Engineered goods,
Gems
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 and
jewellery
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, agricultural
products
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 and textiles
at
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in
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 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, all the categories had an increase in
amount
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 of
earning
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earnings
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expect
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except
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 the
gems
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 and
jewellery
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 industry which had a decrease.
Also
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,
petroleum
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 and engineered
products
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 had the highest
amount
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 of
earnings
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 in both years. In the year 2015,
petroleum
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products
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 had the highest number of
earnings
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 with 60
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billions
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billion
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dollors
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dollars
following
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followed
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 by engineered goods in
the
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apply
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second place with above 55
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billions
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billion
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 $.
gEMS
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 AND
JEWELLERY
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 had almost 40
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billions
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billion
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earnings
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in earnings
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. In 2016 ,
the
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apply
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petroleum
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earnings
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 had a slight increase from 2015
while
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 textiles had
15.24
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a 15.24
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% rose.
Furthermore
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, the
amount
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 of money
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that come
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come
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comes
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 from
engineered
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engineering
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 and
petroleum
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had
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apply
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almost equaled in 2016
also
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 textiles and agricultural
products
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 earned
same
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the same
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amount
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 of money in 2016.
In addition
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,
gems
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 and
jewellery
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 had 40
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billions
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billion
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dollors
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dollars
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earnings
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in earnings
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, earnings, petroleum, products, gems, jewellery, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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